Friday, September 19, 2008

Eve, Ryan and Fannie

Put your biography here by Sunday midnight and then comment on someone else's biography before next Wednesday's class.
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September 20, 2008 at 10:28 PM
Eve Yan said...
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September 20, 2008 at 10:59 PM
Anonymous said...

Second Draft of Eve’s Autobiography

Eve Yan is married, a wife, and a student. She was born in Shanghai, China. Her birthplace is the biggest city in China. It is known in modern, trading, and economic business. It is located on China’s central eastern coast at the mouth of Yangtze River. She is the only child. Her father is a construction worker while her mother is a restaurant crew. She had lived in this beautiful city for twenty three years. Curiosity had inspired her to left her birthplace. In her mind, why everybody is going to Canada? Then, she decided to try it herself. Today, Eve’s birthplace is considered to be the world’s fastest growing economy.


During her childhood, her grandfather has taught her write and spells her name. In her pre-school, her grandfather dropped and picked her up from the school. When she was three years old, her father forced to leave them for farming. Her hardworking parents left her at grandparent’s house. On her elementary school days, her father influenced the most. He helped her homework on a daily basis. Her mother prepares good food for her. When she was seven years old, she elected to be trainee for the national team. Unfortunately, nose infection had caused her to stop swimming. Eve’s first’s adventure were to ride a bus and train by herself. During her adulthood, she considered her daughter were the most important to her life. She was able to rethink the meaning of life. She became better person, more patient and more reliable individual.


Eve has studied Bachelor of Degree in Business Administration in China. She graduated from school successfully. She found a job in business world and worked for two years. When she arrived in Canada at the age of twenty three she went to school. She took an Info Export at Vancouver Community College. She finished the course and got a good job at Vancouver Airport as a Freight Forwarder. She had been working for one year and a half.


The major accomplishment’s she had were learning in Canada independently and being a mother had changed her significantly. She preferred and loved family oriented living than in business oriented living. She had learned to compromised and be able to think her family other than herself. She became mature and responsible. She spent most of her time to her adorable daughter and to her loving husband. Her role as a mother kept her busy everyday. She drives her daughter to pre-school and activities like piano and going to parks. And according to her, her life now focuses more on her own family. She hoped for the best thing will happen to her daughter. She is content, happy, and self-sufficient person. Above all her motherhood helps her grow emotionally, and mentally. She had planned to work fulltime and pursue her own career when her daughter is big and independent.

September 21, 2008 at 11:55 PM
Ryan said...

Fannie was born in Ise Bella of Philippine. She loved her birthplace but her dreams were to live and get a better opportunity in Canada. Her birthplace was a simple and growing town. The major crops were rice, corn, vegetables like eggplant, and tomatoes. It was growing in terms of commerce, the number of professionals, and the number of population too. Hopefully, when she is old enough, she will be going back there to live.

Her parents had agricultural affairs. She and her three older brothers and older sister helped their farm work and they cultivated vegetables, rice and tobacco. She, her mother and her sister helped cultivating the crops and her father and brothers sold the farm products.

This is when she was an elementary school student. One day she went waterfall with her friends. They were swimming in the water. At that time, one of her friends jumped into the water from the top of the waterfall, and then he never came out of there. She and her friends were so terrified and surprised This accident threw them into a panic. And then after this happening, she was assured that she would never jump wherever she would go.

After few years later, she left her birthplace, because she wanted to live western way of living. She also wanted find a better job, good opportunity increase her education while she was working. It was her dream to live in Canada.

She loved her father so much and her father did so too of course. Her father had influenced her in her childhood days. He supported in her school works and helped her in her homework on a daily basis. He encouraged her to get involved in school actively like sports, dance and singing. That was why she loved school and whatever her father told she was obeying them. He gave her advice about life and this confusing society. Her father was very important as a great teacher and an adviser in her life.

After her father died, which was in her adulthood, her mother gave her positive influence. She wanted to be a nurse to help and to support people, however, she couldn't be, because She decided to become a teacher. She has earned the degree of Science in Teaching and She has used my profession back in the Philippines. She has taught 3 years in the middle school. And She taught fifteen-year-old boy, when she was 21 years old. That boy, who was taught by her, loved her a lot. She gave him admonition that he couldn't do, but he kept loved her for three years. She loved to teach with her students but she could not handle the heavy load of responsibilities. So She quitted.

After this period, She immigrated to Canada. Finally now, She has her lovely husband, a cute three-year-old boy, and a four-month baby. Her husband keeps taking care of their babies and they are spending the most beautiful and unforgettable time of their life. Because her family is the most important being to her, her dream is that she will live with happiness with her precious family. The value of family cannot be judged to her and every people.

To live balanced, she has to get going to work. Her major accomplishments are to be in the Healthcare Industry. Being a mother helped her to be more patient, self-giving love, learn to sacrifice her time for her kids and for her husband. She becomes more loving to all people around her. She becomes mature and modest. She lived and enjoyed the Canadian way of living. She became aware the needs of others and her community. She also grew closer to God. She prays and goes to church too.

This is all about Fannie's story that I have heard from her. She has great family and wonderful personality. I hope she will be going well whatever she does in her future.

September 22, 2008 at 12:05 PM
Eman said...

hey Eve,i like your biography about Ryan.it is interesting and has lots of good details.Good job Eve:)

September 23, 2008 at 6:52 PM
a crazy couple said...

Ryan's biography

Eve, I know is difficult to keep tracking right in gender differences and verb tenses in English language for Chinese people, but you have to be careful of it here. look at this sentence: " During his childhood,...., for she teach her a lots of ..." -You are speaking about Ryan who is a man and in the past tense. also, the composition of the "most importantly" is completely incorrect. You have to use "most important". You can shorten a little of Ryan's biography by giving short facts in short sentences. Good luck

September 23, 2008 at 8:53 PM
Eve Yan said...
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September 24, 2008 at 10:44 AM
Eve Yan said...

Hi, Fannie, your biography is dominated by short sentences. Maybe, you can enrich it by putting more complex sentences.

"Eve’s first’s adventure were to ride a bus and train by herself." I don't think I have told you that. This part is not true.

There is some details of my childhood, like my father went to the farm, you can make it more interesting by introducing the culture revolution as a social background.

Good effort.

September 24, 2008 at 10:52 AM
Anonymous said...

hi Eve,
Good job. You just need to have introduction. So far its good.

September 24, 2008 at 11:43 AM
Anonymous said...

hi ryan,

Few are typo errors but it was good. thanks for describing me well.

September 24, 2008 at 11:47 AM
Eve Yan said...

Ryan was born in Seoul, South Korea. That is a major city of South Korea. He has lived in Seoul for 14 years. He had lots of childhood friends, and they loved to play soccer and computer games together. When he was 12 years old, he studied at DangSanSeo Middle School in Seoul for one year and half. Ryan’s father is an architect, and his mother is a home maker. He has one younger sister. During his childhood, his mother is the most influential people of his life, for she taught him a lot of life skills. As time goes by, his father began to have more influence to his life. His father taught him the right attitude and principle of life and society.


When he was 14, the family moved to Jeju Island because his father had an architectural project there. Jeju Island is a very beautiful place, the water and the air is clean, and there is a big mountain in the middle of the island. Ryan went to middle school in Jeju Island for another one year and half.


The childhood life seems to reach an end when he started his high school at the age of 15. It is school’s requirement to study from 7:30AM to 11:00 PM. There are nine courses during the day, and each course lasts about 50 minutes. After dinner in school cafeteria, the students need to stay inside the school and continue studying on their own until 11:00 PM. They are not allowed to go back home earlier unless they got parents’ approval. The reason for this intensive study is the competition. Everyone wants to go to Seoul University after high school graduation, and there are not enough seats in the university. Sometimes he had only four to five hours of sleep, and could barely open his eyes during the classes. Teachers discipline the students by smacking their faces, buns and hands. The students try to complain by writing blogs on the internet, but that action would not change anything. The physical punishments are commonly accepted by the society. It is also mandatory for the boys to attend the army for two years right after university graduation.


After he studied one year and half in high school on Jeju Island, his parents made a major life decision for him to come to Canada and continue his high school. He has been in Vancouver for two years now and is twenty years old. He is going to take English 11 and 12 courses and plan to go UBC in 2009. He wants to study engineering or art courses. The reason of his study is not necessary to get a high paid job but most important to find a job that suits his aptitude.

October 10, 2008 at 12:02 PM

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