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Rita was born in ShenYang, a city in Northeast of China and grew up in ChangChun , another city not so far from ShenYang. Both are industrial cities in China. Her hometown was famous for its coldness of winter. It was normal that knee deep snow covered the ground and heavy gust of winds roared. It surely was a hard time for adults, but, for little girl, Rita, it was a good opportunity to gain some pleasure. She had snowball fight with her friends and piled up a large mount of snow to build a snowman in front of her house.
The time flied, Rita turned to seven years old. She went to elementary school to start her education. After college, she found a job. Although she could get a good salary and benefits, she was not satisfied because she felt boring and there was no future. Rita decided to go aboard. At that time, there were two countries she could choose, Japan and Singapore. Considering Singapore was far from her hometown and it was very hot, she preferred to Japan. After saying goodbye to her family, she took off in plane to Japan.
She lived in Japan for more than ten years. During these time, the got married and had a boy. With the growth of her son, Rita began to think about the Education of Japan. In her opinion, education of Japan was not good enough, so their family emigrated to Canada two years ago. Unfortunately, her husband had to stay in Japan to continue his work because the contract had not been completed yet. The couple had to be separated.
Rita and her son lived near Metrotown in Burnaby in initial stage since they moved to Canada and then they settled down in New Westminster. It was very tough for a woman to take care the child without any help; however, now she can smile because her husband will leave for Canada next month and not return to Japan.
To Rita, her father had the most important influence on her in childhood years. Rita’s mother worked in another city and could come home every half year. Therefore, her father looked after Rita and her younger brother. In her memories, her father was always busy. Despite having his own work, he carried them to school by his bicycle, cooked three meals and helped their study. Up until now, Rita still remembers the meal cooked by her father was so savory. Rita learned a lot from her father, such as her independence, confidence, and optimism.
At present, Rita studies English and some other courses like accounting and data management in PALC . Even though she has not determined her own career path , she hopes what she studied in PALC can help her in the future.
Nicely done Mia!The vivid detail makes it a pleasure to read and helps me to better know Rita. What do you think of the idea of starting with Rita in the snow and then introducing her city? Try it and see what you think.
Eman
Eman is from Iraq. Eman is her English name, means faithful. She also has another beautiful name Ashty which she uses in Iraq. She was born, and grew up in a city called Duhok in North Iraq. She is the only daughter with three brothers. Duhok is in a province which is called kurdistan Region, controlled by special government. The residents speak Kurdish besides Arabic which is Iraq’s official language. The war in Iraq did not affect her hometown a lot; however, she said that she is lucky to be far away from the war, it is terrible to hear the war and people died.
Eman likes most of Iraqi believes in Islam. It does not mean that she should wear hijab (veil) to cover her body, and only 50% of Muslim women are wearing hijab nowadays. Because that pigs are unclean in their religion, Muslims are fobidden by God to eat pork. Although Muslims have their own discipline, back her hometown, they live in harmony with Chritian people. Eman also has many Chritian friends.
Since she was very young, her mother gives her the most influence. Her mother is enthusiastic for children’s ecucation and always supports her to be more educated and do what her want to do. Because the mother’s support, Eman finished all the courses in high school in her hometown, and had been in college, majored in English before she came to Canada. Eman said that she is always appreciate her mother’s guide, encourage and support.
Eman came to Canada with her family about two years ago. Her whole family like Canada very much. She is glad to have opportunity to continue her study here. She is young and still single so that her first goal is to finish high school. She has already passed some courses in the PALC, such as Science 10, Communication 12, and Civics 12. She is planning to choose a major which is fit for her, and then go to college. She believes that better education will give her more opportunity to have a good job here.
Eman is an optimistic and energic person. She likes her study and works hard for her goals. She tries hard to adapt herself to the new life in Canada, and be proud of herself. Although here is different from her hometown, she started everything all over again, she said that because her whole family is here, she does not want to look back, and with her efforts, she believes that she is going to have a better life in Canada.
The Accomplishments of Rita
Rita is a Chinese woman who has been faced lots of difficulties in her life. She was born in Shanyang, a city which occurs in north China. Although she born in Shanyang, she grew up in a different city and stayed there for twenty years. In her country, China, people speak two languages as mother language, but Rita and her family know only one mother language which is called Mandrin.
Rita liked education a lot. After she graduated a high school, she studied in university and prepared to be a mechanical engineer. When she graduated, she found lots of difficulties about her job because she had to work with big machines which were unsafe for her health. So, she decided to leave that job and travel to Japan because her friends advised her that there are lots of job opportunity available for her in Japan.
Then, Rita moved to Japan. Although she found lots of jobs there, yet she had another problem. Her big problem was the Japanese language which seems away different than Chinese language. Since Rita is ambitious person, she decided to attend Japanese schools for language. And that what really happened with her, she kept studying for six years; two years language and four years university. After that, she became a successful translator for she spoke both Chinese and Japanese languages. During the time that she worked, she introduced to a man through friends, and she found him a good man to share her life with, so they got married. Rita has been married for eight and half years ,and she had a son who is seven years old.
Rita has lots of ambitions , and she usually seeks for education. She decided to leave Japan and travel to Canada because she thought that education in Canada is much better than in Japan or China. So, she emigrated to Vancouver with her son before two years. Now she lives in New Westminster ,B.C. Her husband stayed in Japan for he has a good job there, however, he plans to work in Vancouver when he finds a good time for that.
Although Rita faces many difficulties, she is hardworking and optimistic. She has duties as both mother and student; she spends lots of time with her son for he is a child and student who always needs help. Also, she has home responsibilities such as, cooking and cleaning. Moreover, Rita is a student in Pearson Adult Learning Center who studies English 11 with some extra subjects. She plans to have a have a high school diploma in order to go to college and study more. She thinks that working after graduation is the best way for having a good job.
For Rita, her son is everything in her life. She wants to grow him in very good way, and teach him how to be strong and challenge difficulties. And the reason for those feelings is something related to her childhood. She was really affected by her parents who taught her many essential matters about life. They usually advised her to follow the right way and challenge problems. So, Rita is proud of her accomplishments ,and in the way she looks to things.
hi, Mia, I like the way you write about me. Thank you for writing me. You give the article vivid details and bring back happy memories of my youth.
Hi Rita,thanks for writing nice biography about me.I think writing in blog is perfect idea for developing writing skills ,as well as,it gives us a chance to know about othere students life and
activities.
Hi Rita, the writing is wonderful. After reading, i learnt more about Eman and her background.
Hi Eman, you are great. From your writing, I know much more about Rita that I didn't know before.
Hi, Mia haha , your biography is so much better than before! you added more details and it looks better!! Nice!!! Also , I think you have got reasons about each paragraph. Good job!
From Kenny:
Tuesday, September 23, 2008
Biography of Eman
Eman, one of our team member, has come to Canada from Iraq two years ago. Her name was Ashty when she lived in Iraq but changed to Eman in Canada.
She was born in the city named Duhok, the northern part of Iraq. The city belong to Kurdistan region, where Krud tribe lives mainly by using Kurdish language. Historically Krud tribe has struggled with Iraq and turkey for their independence for a long time. Fortunately her hometown was not affected by on going Iraq war.
She said it takes two years for immigration process to Canada. Under the condition of Iraq war, It seems lucky and quite short period compare with average 5 years in China and 3 years in Korea.
She explained Iraqui habit of living. They don’t drink alcohol and don’t eat pork at all according to religious reason. They like to eat ram and chicken. There is no lion and tiger in Iraqi territory but there are a lot of camel.
She don’t like former president Hussain because of corruption, extreme power in his family and no democracy. Iraq has several tribes and religious sectors of Islam, which has hostilities each other.
Her family are happy living in Canada. She likes her mother who eager to support Eman’s education from small girl until now. She want to have college education for better living in Canada
It is very interesting to listen quite different traditions and history with me.
Kenny Lee
Thanks Mia.I like your your writing too.Although we both wrote about Rita,each of us has different expression,and that is interesting.
Hi Kenny,thanks for writng a good biography about me.I suggest to set together and talk more about me in order to have lots of details.Thanks again.
Hi Eman: A complete portrait of Rita's interesting life story. To improve, try to find a place where you might use some sensory details (ask Rita for some).
Rita: You've given me an accurate and interesting picture of Eman's complex story and have also explained some of the special aspects of her heritage. Please seek a sensory detail or two from Eman to help make the biography even better.
Hi Mia, good writing, and I really admired it. But in the second paragraph“She felt boring”? You mean the job was boring or she was bored?
Kenny lee
Kenny lee, one of my classmates, was born in Seoul. Seoul is the capital of Korea for more than 500 years. So, it is a historical, cultural, and political center. Also, its weather is very cold in winter and so hot in summer. The city is surrounded by beautiful mountains, and it has a big river which is called Hanyang. When Kenny lee was so young, he had lots of pleasant time with that cool river; he was usually swimming, jumping, and playing with other boys.
When Kenny lee was seven years old, a civil war happened between north and south Korea. They kept fighting for three years. As a result of that war, the economy of the country became very low because the government could not import food, clothes, and medications. At that time, people had severe life, and many of Kenny lee’s relatives and friends dead for there were lots of explosions. When I asked Kenny lee about his feeling at that time, he replied, “I had bad feeling; I still remember the scene of death while buildings were burning, and people dead in front of my eyes.” so it was terrible time in Korea.
After Kenny lee completed high school, he studied engineering in university. Then, became a civil engineer. He built port facilities for both private company and government official. He chose engineering because he received more salary than any other jobs. At the beginning, he did a variety of works related to civil engineering, like, airport, highway, port, and bridge constructions. Later, he chose ports specifically because he likes sea a lot. Kenny lee kept working on port construction until he retire
Kenny lee lived most his life,60 years, in Seoul. The system of work in Korea says that a person should be retired from work when he/she becomes 60 years old. So that was the main reason for Kenny lee to leave Korea because he thought that he had nothing to do more there. He decided to travel to Canada in order to learn English and have a better life for his family, his wife and three
Sons.
The important person for Kenny lee since his childhood until now is his parents. Also, when he was so young, he liked skating , and climbing mountains. In the age of 30th,he climbed many mountains in Korea. He enjoyed lots of beautiful views of nature while he was on the top of mountains. Kenny lee still climbing mountains. He said: “During my five years in Canada, I have been climbed every single mountain in Vancouver.”
Besides climbing mountains, Kenny lee has another interesting activity which is skating on the ice in winter. He chooses evening times for doing that fun activity because he likes nature at that specific time, especially the sea. He always goes to Syprus Ski resort, and he describes the moments when he is on the cable lift of skating as amazing moments for he can see the wonderful scene of sunset when the clouds are around the sun; they both have yellow/orange colours. And the sea looks very calm. So Kenny lee has enjoyable time while he is practising his activities.
The major accomplishments for Kenny lee is when he worked on port construction. It is important for him because he has experience for many important details of building Pusan and Inchan, the two famous Korean ports. He contributed important roles of the projects, planning, financing, construction operation…etc. So, Kenny lee is proud of what he had learned, and he still plans to educate more.
Hi Brad,i have written another biographyh which is about Kenny lee,and my last draft will be about him insted of Rita.The reason for doing that is because we both,me and Mia, wrote about Rita, but no one writes about Kenny lee.So,i think it is a good chance for me to improve my writnig.
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