Wednesday, April 29, 2009

Showing a Trait of a Character

Post an excerpt (max 75 words) demonstrating the trait "nervous". Please make sure that you show the trait rather than tell it. Try to include other elements of fiction if you can.
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Frank Jin said...

It is the only interview for Wales for the recently three months. He got up early and arrived at the interview office one hour before the appointed time. This was a seldom fine sunshine day in Vancouver. However, then, Wales felt a little bit cold in the waiting room, while seeing other interviewers entering and leaving. Wales arranged his tie and suit collar unconsciously again and again and repeat murmuring in mind the words he prepared before, “I am Wales, I had been working at…..” “Mr Wale is the next” the receptor declared. “I am here” he replied hurried. When he entered the interview office, there was nothing in his mind and he could not remember any one word he prepared before.

April 29, 2009 at 4:17 PM
taruna said...

“Wow what an amazing start”, it was in the morning, my hands were shaking, my face was all sweaty and red the moment I saw the world come near me. My legs were vibrating ,my heard bit raised up to 100 bit per second; sounding “boom boom” the moment I saw my love(husband) come near me and touch me for the first time .He was so handsome that I froze to death- just like a mummy .
Words 77

April 30, 2009 at 5:54 PM
LINDA LIU said...

He stood facing the window at the corner in the ballroom, looking something on the street where actually nothing over there. He could hear the girls behind him giggling and gossiping about his suit. Faking confidence, he kept standing still as if he is out of situation; however, the swear was constantly poking out from his face and his body seemed to swell out of the suit.
“Damn suit!” he groaned painfully.
72 words

April 30, 2009 at 6:16 PM
Qin said...

She ceaselessly turned the test papers. The noise broke the accounting classroom’s silence. She looked around and muttered, “It doesn't balance.” The time passed swiftly; some students walked to the front of the classroom to hand in their papers. Her gaze swept over them. Trembling, she asked, “May I hand in an unbalanced account?”
“You can, if you want to lose the marks,” one student replied. Her pencil and calculator immediately fell to the ground.
(75 words)

April 30, 2009 at 9:14 PM
Wazhma said...

I stopped dead, putting both my hands on my head, “Where is my purse?” I asked. My heartbeat increased. My palms started sweating as I realized that I left my purse at the mall. “I lost all my documents, plane tickets, money…. Oh my God! ” I covered my face with my hands. “What am I going to do?”I asked again. My friend told me to calm down and go back to the mall. Fortunately, I found it at the Customer Service.

80 words

April 30, 2009 at 9:26 PM
molly said...

Lori would secretly e-mail a boy she liked. Her parents found out about it and told her to stop. Lori promised that she would, but didn’t. Her computer then caught a virus; she told her father about it. Her dad who is a computer technician took the computer to fixed, but she quickly jumped up from her chair shaky and sweaty. Grabbing the computer from her dad, “I… I… I… think the computer is fine,” she said. Astound by her reaction, “are you alright,” said her father. “yes I…am fine,” she said.

April 30, 2009 at 9:43 PM
Rita said...

Dinner is ready. She looked outside and took glance at the clock. They had never been so late, she frowned. She took a walk from room to room, and felt it’s never been so silent. She turned on the radio and started to put away her son’s books and toys on the floor. It is just a noise; she turned down the volume and checked the phone to see if it is working properly.
-74 words

May 1, 2009 at 12:04 AM
Maryann said...

Amy couldn’t finish even half of her favorite pasta; excused herself from the table, ran upstairs and began to play the songs which she had been practicing for the last six months because of this competition. As we were finishing up our dinner, everyone heard the banging sound from upstairs: “Oh, poor sis, she made mistakes again,” George mumbled. Amy went to bed exceptionally early; however, I noticed her trip to bathroom all night. 76 words

May 1, 2009 at 8:57 AM
Najlaa said...

Lucie had been waiting anxiously in the room for an hour ;she had a job interview with the manager .While she was sitting on the couch, she muttered some meaningless words.She perspired and her hands got sweaty . Then, she paced in front of the door; she pulled up her while sitting again on the couch.Suddenly,the receptionist called her name; her hands shook while she drew her purse; she trembled on her way to the manager.

May 1, 2009 at 11:19 AM
sherry said...

Jan’s father drove Jan to Tim Hortons for applying a summer job. After the car stopped in front of that store, he didn’t get off immediately, and his face looked hesitated. Also the paper was shaking on his hand. Then his father said: “Just relax, don’t be shy.” After Jan went into the store, his father stood outside, and saw that his son was lowering his head to talk with the manager.

May 1, 2009 at 11:25 AM
Zarmina said...

It was few hours before going to report a documentary on TV. I couldn’t wear my make up properly since my hands were trembling. Next, I got butterflies and didn’t know what to wear. However, when I got at the studio, in lieu to say “HI” I said, “Bye…. I am alright”. By the time I sat in front of the camera and lights started up, my eyes were blinking, my hands and legs were shaking and the rest I don’t recall.

May 1, 2009 at 12:19 PM
suzie said...

Finally Julia got the letter from John (she had been waiting anxiously during these days). She picked up that letter, and walked quickly toward her bed. She stood in front of her bed and could not help stoping her face becoming fire red. She gazed at the front side of the envelop a few seconds, then turned it over to see the back. Suddenly she faced me with her bright eyes filled with helplessness, and asked in a tremble voice, "Should I open it?"

May 7, 2009 at 6:24 PM

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